【No. 0639】Acceptance Speech
Sep 17, 2016 01:08
It was decided that I (and my teacher) would receive an award from an academic society, and next week I will perform a keynote speech in English in commemoration of the win.
Since I never experienced such a speech before, I'm nervous now.
I would really appreciate if you could check the beginning part of my speech.
"Today, I'm feeling honored that we could receive this award. We'd like to strive for further developments of our study from now on also. Well, what we targeted at in this study was about a performance improvement of xxx. Since today is a rare chance, I would like to take this opportunity to introduce the overview of xxx, and the stream of our study."
Since I never experienced such a speech before, I'm nervous now.
I would really appreciate if you could check the beginning part of my speech.
"Today, I'm feeling honored that we could receive this award. We'd like to strive for further developments of our study from now on also. Well, what we targeted at in this study was about a performance improvement of xxx. Since today is a rare chance, I would like to take this opportunity to introduce the overview of xxx, and the stream of our study."
受賞スピーチ
私は来週学会の賞を受賞することになり、その記念に基調講演を英語ですることになりました。
このような経験は初めてなので、講演冒頭部分の英語が不自然でないか、チェックして頂きたい思いです。
「今回、このような賞を頂けて大変光栄に存じます。今後もこの賞を励みとし、更なる発展を目指して研究に取り組んでいく思いです。さて、今回我々が研究の対象としたのは、○○の性能改善についてです。今日はせっかくの機会なので、○○の概要、そして受賞に至るまでの我々の研究の経緯を紹介したいと思います。」
私は来週学会の賞を受賞することになり、その記念に基調講演を英語ですることになりました。
このような経験は初めてなので、講演冒頭部分の英語が不自然でないか、チェックして頂きたい思いです。
「今回、このような賞を頂けて大変光栄に存じます。今後もこの賞を励みとし、更なる発展を目指して研究に取り組んでいく思いです。さて、今回我々が研究の対象としたのは、○○の性能改善についてです。今日はせっかくの機会なので、○○の概要、そして受賞に至るまでの我々の研究の経緯を紹介したいと思います。」
Corrections (1)
No. 1 マーセル
- It was decided that I (and my teacher) would receive an award from an academic society, and next week I will perform a keynote speech in English in commemoration of the win.
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Me (and my teacher) are, as it turns out, to receive an award from one academic society, and next week I will perform a keynote speech in English in commemoration of the win.
This sounds slightly more natural in my opinion. The "as it turns out" adds, I think, the humble tone that you meant by "it was decided".
- Since I never experienced such a speech before, I'm nervous now.
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Since I've never given such a speech before, I'm a bit nervous.
The collocation is "to give a speech"
- I would really appreciate if you could check the beginning part of my speech.
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I would really appreciate it if you could check the beginning part of my speech.
A transitive verb needs an object, even if it's just "it".
- "Today, I'm feeling honored that we could receive this award.
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"It is a great honor and a great privilege to receive this award today.
More formal, and also more correct :)
- We'd like to strive for further developments of our study from now on also.
- We will not let this success satisfy us, and will strive to develop our study further.
- Well, what we targeted at in this study was about a performance improvement of xxx.
- The focus of this study were ways of improving the performance of xxx.
- Since today is a rare chance, I would like to take this opportunity to introduce the overview of xxx, and the stream of our study."
- I would like to take this rare opportunity and give you (or provide) an overview of XXX, as well as the main points raised in our study.
Congratulations! I hope I can help you with your speech!
Toru
Thank you very much for correcting my post and letting me know such cool expressions!
They are really helpful for me! (^^)
Thank you very much for correcting my post and letting me know such cool expressions!
They are really helpful for me! (^^)
マーセル
いいえ！
いいえ！