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【No. 0027】Birthday Present For My Mother

Jan 14, 2015 22:00
Two months ago, I forgot to prepare my mother's birthday present.

And after one month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.

Since I want to give my mother a present at that time, I bought a SSD today.

Of course, my mother doesn't want such a SSD, but she previously said "I wish I could have had my laptop.."

Therefore, I decided to compose a laptop using my old PC components and the SSD.

I'm sure she likes this laptop! :D

Corrections (2)

No. 1　Zöe
  • Two months ago, I forgot to prepare my mother's birthday present.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • And after one month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.
  • And after one a month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.
  • Since I want to give my mother a present at that time, I bought a SSD today.
  • Since I want to give my mother a present at that time, I bought a SSD today.
  • Of course, my mother doesn't want such a SSD, but she previously said "I wish I could have had my laptop.."
  • Of course, my mother doesn't want such a SSD, but she previously said "I wish I could have had my laptop..I wish I had a laptop"

    This sounds a bit weird. If you're quoting her word for word this is fine but if you're paraphrasing then the correction would be helpful.

  • Therefore, I decided to compose a laptop using my old PC components and the SSD.
  • Therefore, I decided to compose make a laptop using my old PC components parts and the SSD.
  • I'm sure she likes this laptop!
  • I'm sure she'll likes this laptop!
  • :D
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
Toru
Thank you so much for correcting me! (*´▽｀*)
No. 2　
  • And after one month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.
  • For some reason, I will be going back to my hometown one month from now.
Toru
Thank you so much for your correction !(^-^)

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