Homecoming

Today, I was return home because I could pack up my work.

I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama.

Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother and my brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.

Actually my mother and I didn't watch episode 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.

There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it to us.

I am a little tired today.

Good night.

帰省

今日は仕事が一段落ついたので実家に帰省しました。

夕方に家につき、甥っ子と姪っ子にお年玉として New Nintendo 3DS をプレゼントしました。

それから家族で夕飯を食べ、母と義兄とスターウォーズエピソード7を観に行きました。

実は私はエピソード4〜6を観ていなかったのですが、楽しかったです。

よくわからないところは、義兄が解説してくれました。

今日は疲れたのでもう寝ます。

おやすみなさい。

• Today, I was return home because I could pack up my work.
• Today, I returned home to pack up my work.

• I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama.
• I arrived home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as a present.

  プレゼント = present

• Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother and my brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.
• We ate dinner, and after that my mother, my brother-in-law and I went to watch Episode 7 of Star Wars.

• Actually my mother and I didn't watch episode 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.
• This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

• There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it to us.
• This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

• I am a little tired today.
• This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

• Good night.
• This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

• Today, I was return home because I could pack up my work.
• Today, I was returned home because I could pack up completed a (significant) phase of my work.

• I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama.
• I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a new Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama (New Year's gifts).

  In general, I recommend providing translations for Japanese words that might be unfamiliar to non-native speakers.

• Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother and my brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.
• This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

• Actually my mother and I didn't watch episode 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.
• Actually, my mother and I didn't watch episodes 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.

• There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it to us.
• There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it them to us.

  edited for consistency in number (parts --> them)

• I am a little tired today.
• This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

• Good night.
• This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

I enjoyed the new Star Wars movie too. I watched it at the only IMAX theater with a 4K laser projector in New England. :)

• Today, I was return home because I could pack up my work.
• Today, I was returned to my hometown because I could pack was able to finish up my work.

• I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama.
• I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama (new year's gift).

• Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother and my brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.
• Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother (and my) brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.

• Actually my mother and I didn't watch episode 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.
• Actually my mother and I didn't watch had never seen episodes 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.

• There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it to us.
• There were some parts that were difficult to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it them to us.

• I am a little tired today.
• This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!